Monthly Archives: November 2011

Posties (100WCGU week #17)

My second entry for the 100 Word Challenge for Grown-Ups really ought to have been easier than my first, last week. You might remember that I had been inspired simply by only having to complete 50 words. (It was like a half-price sale – how could I resist?)

Well – this week is, by comparison, Blue-Cross week. Julia is insisting on contributors completing the challenge in only 21 words. The topical prompt is a perennial favourite in classrooms around the country:

Remember remember the fifth of November
Gunpowder, treason and plot.
I see no reason why gunpowder, treason
Should ever be forgot…

… and Julia’s instructions:

“Now it has a rhythm to it – yes? Your challenge this week is to write something with the same rhythm using only 21 words that include ‘ …in winter we shiver…‘ Easy!”

So. Easy eh? Two and a half hours later, here is Posties:

Deliver, deliver, in Winter we shiver

Packages, presents (and bills)

In ev’ry season, we aggregate fees an’

deliver post, no frills …

I tried to emulate the rhythm, rhyme patterns and meter of the original. Has it worked, or has it led me down restrictive avenues, forcing me to adopt awkward word choices and rhymes? If next week’s challenge isn’t a Haiku …

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